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Dear Diary: Bleed her from the pages
                        because
                        Medusa stays gawking in
                        the corner of her rocky
                        irises.
                
                        She's shooting her rebellion
                        at my mouth & transforming
                        my teeth into ice,
                        she took my resistance
                        & burned it into her sly
                        smiles.

                        I'm forced to dance in her flames
                                    until
                                       I
                                      learn
                                        she's
                                         here
                                          to
                                           stay.
:iconatlantic-lungs:
She is my other half,
& well. she's destroying me.
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Mood: Love ~DarkMinistress Feb 5, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
To be a part of all of your halves is to dance with your own flame. Such ferocity offered with such discipline makes this a very good piece.

I, too, am a victim(?)/part of many halves and each one flourishes in each others devouring.
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Mood: Love *atlantic-lungs Feb 6, 2013  Student Writer
Your feedback is original, i have never heard that before,
thank you :D

Maybe having several parts of you is good,
you need a half to help you when your other
personality won't do it.
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~DarkMinistress Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You have written a wonderfully original poem. I look forward to more.
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Mood: Joy *atlantic-lungs Feb 13, 2013  Student Writer
Thank you so much,
your words make me happy
:hug:
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~NotenSMSK Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:O this was a different work. I liked the imagery and style of writing that you have employed. The expressions were well phrased and had a certain balance to them. I would like to however point out that this work did not explain itself to me... I mean to say that it was not self explanatory and that I have to read the description to understand the work. while that is not that much of a problem I do prefer works that explain themselves...

I do realize that it might have been clear to other readers and perhaps not to me :)
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*atlantic-lungs Nov 24, 2012  Student Writer
I'm sorry it wasn't clear to you.
I might have used a little too much of
phrases.

Sorry.
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~NotenSMSK Nov 24, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You don't have to apologize to me. I just didn't get it much :)
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~Lomaiwe Sep 22, 2012   Artist
You never cease to amaze me.
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*atlantic-lungs Sep 28, 2012  Student Writer
Hehehe <3
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*Hfeather53 Sep 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Interesting perspective on the inner struggle with yourself. I like it. =)
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